My Explaination about the phases of the Moon

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WALT: write an explanation about something that is important to us

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I have used an interesting title that tells the reader what my writing is about
I have used a general statement to introduce the topic
My writing explains how one thing leads to another
I have used time connectives to show the order of the process (first...next…)
I have organised my text using paragraphs
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I have used technical vocabulary
I have used capital letters, full stops and commas

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• Why people have pets
• Why we have school rules
• Why does the human body need food
• Why we should recycle
• Think of something Hay Park School needs and explain why

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PETS

Did you know that the pets can help you when you are in danger?  Also that if the dog is trained the dog so if you are in danger you could tell the dog to bark as loud as it can so that you can hear  the bark and also so that you keep yourselves safe.As well as  they are great to play with.

Did you also knew that the dogs are great for you because if you train you dog if you  are blind you can use your dog to take you there you can also yell like somewhere you want to go to your dog will take you  there. Most of the people have dogs that are German Shepherds  to guide them like the police dogs and also the German shepherds they are great for you and they could help you out if you need any rescue they could bark for help if you are stuck and also they can do all sort of other stuff if you be kind and don;t be scared because if you show fear they won't listen to you,and did you know if you do show fear the dog will know and if the dog chases you it’s because you are writing and because that the dog is scared more than you are scared of so make sure if you have a dog show mana(mana means respecting  in maori)the dog so he can calm down if you are scared don't be because they are nice and kind.